tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post2316518120538212770..comments2023-10-17T07:00:42.718-03:00Comments on Love YA: Team Mónica #3 -- STITCHING SNOWAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00482654021641010175noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-76188495221540578442012-06-02T19:50:49.733-04:002012-06-02T19:50:49.733-04:00Congrats on landing an agent! This does indeed sou...Congrats on landing an agent! This does indeed sound amazing!!!Lynn(e) Schmidthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13111991752818662608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-65578503775442143172012-05-22T13:03:13.136-04:002012-05-22T13:03:13.136-04:00Snow White in space is pretty intriguing. I actual...Snow White in space is pretty intriguing. I actually laughed out loud at that. Your query is awesome, nice work.Stephscohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06328839483008086049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-64169299613860818852012-05-22T10:05:59.854-04:002012-05-22T10:05:59.854-04:00#3 STITCHING SNOW
Query:
You set up an intriguin...#3 STITCHING SNOW<br /><br />Query:<br /><br />You set up an intriguing world here and a feisty main character. I did assume in the first paragraph that the mining settlement was on earth, though, so if it’s on another planet, you might want to pop that in. (You might also want to pop a “that” into this sentence: “What Kyle doesn’t know is THAT she had…”)<br /><br />The final line is amusing, although I have to say that the plot presented in the query really didn’t make me think of Snow White at all.<br /><br />First page: <br /><br />Fight! Fight! =) I love getting thrown right into the action here, and getting to know Essie’s personality by seeing what goes through her mind as she fights. The writing is really strong and you do a great job of giving us glimpses of the world we’re in (“Settlement Forty-Two,” “shock-fiber handwraps”) without hitting us over the head with it. I think that this is really nicely done.Tara Dairmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02553180762608936696noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-34766658911835281292012-05-21T22:30:38.974-04:002012-05-21T22:30:38.974-04:00I vote for you!I vote for you!Roseanne Wellshttp://twitter.com/#!/rivetingrosienoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-58261450435216305652012-05-21T11:22:41.086-04:002012-05-21T11:22:41.086-04:00I vote for you!I vote for you!Andrea Sombergnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-7479768488498333152012-05-21T09:35:00.053-04:002012-05-21T09:35:00.053-04:00I vote for you!I vote for you!Lauren MacLeod of The Strothman Agencyhttp://www.strothmanagency.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-76699213490759554062012-05-20T13:35:48.920-04:002012-05-20T13:35:48.920-04:00Love this concept! Snow White in space! So cool. A...Love this concept! Snow White in space! So cool. And I'm not even much of a sci-fi reader. But I'd pick this up! Good luck!Noelle Henryhttp://noellehenry.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-18359693614976202862012-05-19T16:56:52.267-04:002012-05-19T16:56:52.267-04:00Your entire query letter rocks hard, but ending wi...Your entire query letter rocks hard, but ending with this is brilliant: STITCHING SNOW is a tale of Snow White in space, if Snow were a cage-fighting tech-head with daddy issues. Love that! I can't wait to read the entire thing!Jennie Baileyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02088195986628533511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-50681631048297558722012-05-19T16:33:15.622-04:002012-05-19T16:33:15.622-04:00I remember this from the first round. Loved it the...I remember this from the first round. Loved it then too! Great last line of your query. Great opening scene!Kimberly Gabrielhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05588782441929008886noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-59974832070354758082012-05-19T08:32:46.618-04:002012-05-19T08:32:46.618-04:00Love both the query and the snippet - awesome writ...Love both the query and the snippet - awesome writing! :)Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-82939672493680252222012-05-19T01:51:14.960-04:002012-05-19T01:51:14.960-04:00Snow White in space. There you go!
Good luck!Snow White in space. There you go!<br /><br />Good luck!TYHatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00654651712633828288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-16779987198280519262012-05-18T21:41:31.402-04:002012-05-18T21:41:31.402-04:00Great query...and I ADORE the title. I would defi...Great query...and I ADORE the title. I would definitely read this!Lisa K.https://www.blogger.com/profile/00379245068324225101noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-72535974885212073602012-05-18T19:10:45.055-04:002012-05-18T19:10:45.055-04:00Still love this concept and would love to read mor...Still love this concept and would love to read more! Good luck!Jamie Corriganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11837319723353425561noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-7071208025834185612012-05-18T16:18:39.575-04:002012-05-18T16:18:39.575-04:00Neat twist on the old fairytale. Good luck!Neat twist on the old fairytale. Good luck!Sarah Hensonhttp://wordencounters.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-53000808148755644102012-05-18T16:14:01.818-04:002012-05-18T16:14:01.818-04:00Love Essie, love the premise, triple love the voic...Love Essie, love the premise, triple love the voice in the opening. So glad this one is in the running - I think it's going to be a big hit on Monday!Becca C.http://beccaweston.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-67754876632336530962012-05-18T15:05:23.616-04:002012-05-18T15:05:23.616-04:00Very cool concept!Very cool concept!Cortney Pearsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00774060537148628453noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-52013890127208742342012-05-18T10:02:05.370-04:002012-05-18T10:02:05.370-04:00This is totally one of my favorites - I LOVE the t...This is totally one of my favorites - I LOVE the the concept and the writing is fantastic. I hope you get a ton of requests!Jamie Greyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07504892632149036762noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-53673233948179162892012-05-18T01:59:35.551-04:002012-05-18T01:59:35.551-04:00Sound so cool! I wish you luck, my dear. :)Sound so cool! I wish you luck, my dear. :)Stephanie Diazhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10606180983300679986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-58154366806679928042012-05-18T00:27:10.820-04:002012-05-18T00:27:10.820-04:00Love the specificity you've worked into the qu...Love the specificity you've worked into the query - and of course, THE CAGE FIGHT. All that's missing is the drones! :D Love it - GOOD LUCK!MarcyKatehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08303670174583471227noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-25238450757551360612012-05-17T18:01:36.408-04:002012-05-17T18:01:36.408-04:00LOVE the last line of your query! The MC seems lik...LOVE the last line of your query! The MC seems like a total badass--I'd follow her anywhereValeriehttp://www.valerie-cole.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-31332258339000100002012-05-17T16:45:06.886-04:002012-05-17T16:45:06.886-04:00This. I'm sold. Sign me up, I want on this r...This. I'm sold. Sign me up, I want on this ride!tlbodinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08334888426768433724noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-9553053763715718042012-05-17T15:47:06.839-04:002012-05-17T15:47:06.839-04:00Honey... you rock. That is a freaking awesome quer...Honey... you rock. That is a freaking awesome query and opening. So fascinated to see where it goes next.Heather Clarkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13826379973881691514noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-29088261099904697732012-05-17T14:44:06.301-04:002012-05-17T14:44:06.301-04:00This is one of those stories that I would normally...This is one of those stories that I would normally not even be interested in and you make a complete convert out of me because the story is just that good!!April Wallhttp://aewelch.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-52874250703291798622012-05-17T14:39:10.397-04:002012-05-17T14:39:10.397-04:00Snow White in space is all I needed to LOVE all of...Snow White in space is all I needed to LOVE all of this. Seriously. Great voice, great query!!erica m. chapmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14773306703153110737noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-200721485261992830.post-27631812758338598782012-05-17T14:31:22.670-04:002012-05-17T14:31:22.670-04:00"STITCHING SNOW is a tale of Snow White in sp..."STITCHING SNOW is a tale of Snow White in space, if Snow were a cage-fighting tech-head with daddy issues."<br /><br />Can I just say that this line alone is enough to make me want to read this? Go Team Monica!Ambiguous_Ahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14401920531742299549noreply@blogger.com