THE FAKELORE GIRL
YA Fantasy
81,000 words
QUERY:
Island girl Fenella is a masterful liar. Her fakelore and skills of persuasion conceal
her people’s source of forbidden magic from outsiders. But the sixteen-year-old’s tales of dragons
and krakens can’t prevent a royal visit: the king and his sons are heading to
the island as part of his coronation tour.
Or so they say.
Then a shipwrecked young lad washes up on the
beach. He claims amnesia. Fenella names the ogle-worthy stranger
‘Drake’ and feigns interest in him to investigate further, determined to
protect the island at all costs.
Puckering up her lying lips, she kisses her way into his confidences. But she’s no longer sure how to fake her interest
when he flirts back. As his memory
returns, he tells her he’s on the run for practicing forbidden magic. Magic nearly destroyed the kingdom years ago,
and the new monarch will hang anyone caught using it. Fenella will keep Drake hidden, but won’t admit
her own magical ability will awaken soon.
Not with the king on his way.
But it takes a liar to spot a liar--and Fenella’s
not the only one being economical with the truth. That signet ring Drake hides on a chain
around his neck? It’s a royal heirloom. Unless Fenella pulls off her biggest fakelore
yet and persuades Drake to join their side, the king will discover her secrets--and
she’ll swing from the harbor gallows along with every magic-wielding islander there.
FIRST PAGE:
Lying spread-eagled on an altar wasn’t an experience for the faint-hearted:
the knife the priestess sharpened mere inches from me looked evil. And the smile on her lips showed just how
much she relished that task. Barbarian.
The evening tide ebbed from the open-air temple dedicated to the goddess
Drina. Waves lapped against the two
stone columns standing as a gateway to the sea and the krakens haunting its
depths. Things could have been
worse. I could’ve been chained to those
columns, awaiting my death one kraken mouthful at a time.
I wiggled my fingers and toes. Whenever
I dreamed up new fakelore to tell, I liked to throw myself into character, and
this was no exception. My fingertips and
the heels of my feet touched the four corners of the granite slab. Grains of sand rubbed against my skin. If I were truly about to be sacrificed by a
zealous priestess, this temple wasn’t a bad place to die.
My thoughts turned in an irreverent direction as the sea breeze wafted
over my generous curves on the altar. In
this fakelore of mine, would Drina want her human sacrifice unhindered by
clothes?
I frowned. “Should I be naked?”
“What, right now?” The knife
stilled in Cressey’s hand. “Fenella,
nobody wants to see that.”
Oops. I hadn’t meant to say that out
loud.
“Will you stop messing about?” She
huffed in exasperation. “Get off the
altar.”
My fakelore fizzled and died in my mind, and I was brought back to
reality. My sister Cressey was merely a
novitiate, not a priestess (zealous or otherwise), and the prospect of a long
thanksgiving service (not a sacrifice)
to Drina loomed before me.
This query is like a piece of amber perfectly encapsulating your story. I felt an instant affinity with Fenella and by the end I liked "Drake" too. It's very nicely done. Best of luck. I hope you get an agent!
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Rebecca
Wow! This one sounds really interesting. Unique idea, playful MC, and I already want to know what happens with this intriguing plot. This looks like a winner for sure. Good luck!
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ReplyDeleteWhat a fantastic opening line. I'm immediately intrigued. I vote for you!
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