SOMEBODY THAT I USED TO KNOW
Contemporary
YA
60,000 words
60,000 words
QUERY
Three months
after her father's funeral, Dani Butler receives a heart-stopping email. The sender claims to be her father and says
he had no choice but to fake his own death. He asks Dani to enroll in Lexington
Preparatory Academy to help him commandeer the evidence to send the men after
him to jail.
A shy girl like
Dani has no business attending the infamous military academy CNN dubbed
"boot camp for teens," but if there's the slightest chance the email
is real, she can't ignore it.
As Dani
investigates, she realizes how little she knows about the man she lived with
and idolized for sixteen years. And Dani is changing. In the process of leading
her team to victory in the school's war games and sneaking off campus to
further her investigation, she realizes she isn't the sort to blindly follow
anyone. But old patterns are hard to
break, and when Dani discovers her father's real agenda, she must finally
overcome the last of her dependency on him.
Because her father is bent on revenge, and if she can't retrieve the
top-secret missile schematics she inadvertently helped him steal, the security
of the school--and the nation--will be at risk.
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I
need your help.
I tear my gaze from the email's subject
line. It lands on the sender's
name--soldierOfFortune--and adrenaline floods my veins, flushing out the numbness
that sustained me these last few months.
Dad. The thought hits my brain in that split
second before logic intervenes, reminding me how impossible that would be.
On closer examination, the address is
soldierOfFortune@funmail.com, not soldierOfFortune@maildaze.com. The account this stupid spammer chose just
happens to be similar to the email address my dad always used.
I lean back in my chair, trying to calm
down, but my heart is still racing from the adrenaline rush. I'm aware of everything around me. The musty smell that has clung to The
Captain's guestroom, despite a thorough cleaning and new paint. The flicker of my laptop monitor. The blood whooshing through my veins.
I want to delete the message, but my
fingers have other plans. Before I realize
what I'm doing, I've clicked it open.
I’m
not dead.
I stare at the screen, waiting for the
words to rearrange themselves into a Viagra advertisement or a money-wiring
scam, but they don't move. It's not spam
at all. It's someone's idea of a sick joke.
Anger sears through my body. I shove my laptop away, but it doesn't
help. I've never been in a fight before,
but if the person who sent this email walked up to me, I'd deck him.
I pace the length of the room, running
through a mental list of suspects.
Justin Thompson was pissed when I outscored him on last year's Geometry
midterm.
Gahhh, I am SO in love with this concept!!! It sounds absolutely FANTASTIC!!! :D Good luck!!
ReplyDeleteOooh. I'm intrigued! Good luck!!!
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ReplyDeleteLove the query and your first 250 is spectacular. I'm craving to read more.
DeleteGreat work!! Good luck!
The voice is AMAZING. Plus, a killer story. As someone who lost her dad as a teen, your first 250 had me right out of the gate. I can FEEL her hope. And her anguish.
ReplyDeleteHUGS! Can't wait for all the requests!!
The emotions, the writing, the plot! When is this getting published?
ReplyDeleteAmazing!!! Love a good mystery all fraught with emotions!! Woo!
ReplyDeleteThis sounds wonderful and I enjoyed the writing. I'd love to see it!
ReplyDeleteYou've been ninja'd! I would love to see a pitch, one-page synopsis, and the first fifty pages. Please send it as a word attachment to...(contact Monica/Brenda for further details!). Looking forward to reading your work :)
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